A dream seen which was chimerical to dream of 
the only thing what the sculptor wanted was love
yes indeed an absurd thing to think 
along with a perfect face that makes you sink,

and melt to the ground
she wasn't the diamond the blended into the background
 flawless and speechless beauty
however, lifeless and never to be

A frozen life like in a photo
stood the ivory stone while you watched it from below 
come to life and breathe 
if it was possible he would believe

slow movement were created from each part of her body
her stone lips filled with a strawberry
She was alive, and the onyl word that came to mind was impossible
happily the became one, to him there was no other angel

2/4/2011 12:32:51 am

I really enjoyed the way you used descriptive words-to make your characters more life-like. I felt that the poem needed to explore different emotions of one of the characters in Pygmalion to make the poem unique- so that it did not just relay what we learned in the myth itself. Still,the poem flowed wonderfully and had excellent sensory imagery

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